Team 4 Integrating Sources

----------Liz Simon -------original followed by change-------------------------------

Divorced singles "compromise 31% of online daters" (Brymer et al., 13).

Divorced singles are believed to account for "31% of online daters" (Brymer et al., 13).

If someone gets involved in a good, healthy relationship “it increases your life expectancy, protects your brain and more” (Stibich).

If someone gets involved in a good, healthy relationship it can improve "your life expectancy, protect your brain and more" (Stibich).

The results showed that married couples had received higher G.PA.’s because they had “a goal minded approach to academics.”

The results showed that married couples had received higher GPA's because they share "a goal minded approach to academics" (Kopfler).

In a conducted study a hundred percent of fifty male students polled stated there were benefits to dating in college. They showed that when they dated that their self-esteem were higher in social settings (Kopfler).


In a study conducted by Kopfler and associates, one hundred percent out of fifty male students polled stated there were benefits to dating in college. They results indicated that when the male students dated their self-esteem was higher in social settings.


Laura Zavresa "original followed by change"
One woman stated that she woke up and it was if she was paralyized, that her " body was there but couldn't see what was going on to it." Some accounted that they would wake up naked or during sex. This man was finally arrested and was charged with the rape of 8 Pennsylvania women. He is being held without bond.

One woman stated (sv) that she woke up and it was if she was paralyzed, that her "body was there, but couldn't see what was going on to it." Not being able to see one's own body(sc) must be a scary feeling because they know that they aren't supposed to be there. It's not a good situation. Some accounted that they would wake up naked or during sex. This man was finally arrested and was charged with the rape of eight Pennsylvania women. He is being held without bond.

Being in a relationship does not just effect people’s health; relationships have been known to affect academic performance. “While involved in a relationship during college, one might be forced to choose either studying for school or spending time with the significant other, leaving the student with increased amounts of stress.” What really affects performance is the level of commitment the couple has to the relationship.

Being in a relationship does not just effect people's health; relationships have been known to affect academic performance, and as Kopfler (not sure if this is the right source, but I think it is) says(sv), "While involved in a relationship during college, one might be forced to choose either studying for school or spending time with the significant other, leaving the student with increased amounts of stress." Stress added on top of school work(sc) is disasterous. What really affects performance is the level of commitment the couple has to the relationship.

Sara Shepherd - original text followed by changes

There are also a number of divorced singles who may have married in their twenties and then found themselves single in their thirties or forties. Divorced singles are believed to account for "31% of online daters" (Brymer et al., 13).

Brymer contends (sv), "31% of online daters" are believed to be divorced singles. These divorced singles (sc) may have married in their twenties and then found themselves single again in their thirties or forties.
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Profiles become "works in progress, continually edited and tweaked with newer more flattering pictures" (Egan, 2). Obviously, the people that spend time creating these detailed profiles are not trying to avoid social interaction, they welcome it.

Egan describes (sv) profiles as, "works in progress, continually edited and tweaked with newer more flattering pictures." This notion of a continually edited profile (sc) makes it clear that the people who spend time creating these detailed profiles are not trying to avoid social interaction, they welcome it.

Caitlin Shahbazi---original followed by change

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In fact, online daters are "more likely to be employed than internet users who do not use online dating services" (Brymer et al., 13).
Brymer stated that online daters are "more likely to be employed than internet users who do no use online dating services."


-He was funny, and easy to talk to: “He made me laugh,” she said.
She said "He made me laugh"; he was funny and easy to talk to.


Krystal's
If someone gets involved in a good, healthy relationship “it increases your life expectancy, protects your brain and more” (Stibich).

When getting involved with someone in a healthy relationship, studies show it "increases one's life expectancy, as well as protecting one's brain."

-He was funny, and easy to talk to: “He made me laugh,” she said.
"He made me laugh," she said while thinking how funny and easy to talk to he was.



Kelly's
One woman stated that she woke up and it was if she was paralyzed, that her " body was there but couldn't see what was going on to it."

One woman could recall waking up as if she were paralyzed , her "body was there but couldn't see what was going on to it."

The man looked at her and said " Let's just get right to the point, what's wrong with you?"

The man stared at her from across the table and blurted out " Let's just get right to the point, what's wrong with you?"